by: Aiman Hakim
This article is mainly about a problem, a phanomena that clearly is happening today and is always at the topof every news. The writer express through his or her writting in the article mainly to inform about what is his opponion when facing refugees, especially when facing a large numbers of people that strictly different in race and ethnics. The writer also showed his expression of dissapointmen to the main reason that this problem is still not been handle seriously by the people that was supposed to be responsible. In the first paragraph the writer starts his article by criticizing the people that did not make any responses regarding to this issue. Thus highlighting the first step which is fixing the real problem when handling refugees.
Based on my observation, the main conten of the
article effect of refugees in many aspects. The writers touches every aspect
that would be most effected by a country when facing refugees. As an example,
the writer listed his view on what will happened to the economic structure, the
social and sometimes politices. He pointed what will be effected through past
occasion accuring refugees in some countries such as Nepal and Ngara. The writer
said in this countries “The presence of refugees, and demands on the already
severely strained economy, services and infrastructure add to the extreme
hardship affecting the local populations. In many instances, refugees become an
added impediment to, or risk jeopardizing, the development efforts of the host
country. Their negative aspects may be felt long after a refugee problem is
solved”
But what is different about this article is that,
although the writer is conveying the bad effects of refugees which is common to
the people when it comes to refugees, but the writer also mentioned in this
article some positive outcome that might and could happen when accepting
refugees. To me this is very shocking, because very less people bring a
positive prespective kind of view towards this problem. As an example , the
writer said “The economic impact of refugees on host areas, however, is not
necessarily negative”. The writer is saying that although refugees may bring
some effects, but not all are negative. As example, the precense of refugees
can also attract development agencies thus lead to the opening of
development projects on the host region.
Not only that, it is also helps in terms of the creation of the employment,
benifiting the local population direct or indirectly.
Looking into the use of language, to me the writer
did a splendid job in using it wisely. As we all know, the writer is targeting
a variety group of people such as the people of the country, politician, and
also the leaders of any countries. The language that the writer used was
acceptable due to the many level of audience. It can easily be understood and
any people that read the article should not have any problem trying to figure
what is the writer trying throw out to them.
In conclusion , the article prove to be a material
worth reading, due to the current issue that is clearly going on in some
country that many have misunderstood it. It is not wrong to comment about
something but try to look it in both ways, with concrit facts and data. With
that, I conclude that the UNHCR did an excellent job on the article.
From this critique, i found out that there is some grammar and spelling mistakes in it. However, from overall view, this critique is nicely done without any involvement of personal views.
ReplyDeleteThe writer is quite impressed by the article as the article shown he or she the both sides of refugees' impacts.
The writer of this critique informed the writers that the impacts of refugees are not completely negative. There is few projects newly implemented due to the influx of refugees into the host countries.
This critique also contain some examples in order to allow the readers to be able to picture out the situation easily.
Based on the critique by Aiman Hakim, I found on that there were several grammar mistakes as well as spelling errors. He did mentioned about the pro and cons about the refugees influx but it is just a slight touch without any further information. He did not provide the writer's tone. Moreover, he did not analyse the passage well as he did not provide any rhetorical function used by the writer. He did not try to explain the writer's rationale and intention to write this article. He did quite a good job in summarizing but failed to analyze it holistically.
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